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Motorcycle Racing Champion and the Circus Arts Aerialist

Women of the Oak Savannahs

I’m still thinking this scene may represent some of the best writing I have ever done. There you go. Just my opinion. I wouldn’t mind finding out what other listeners think. If you do spend time with these two characters, Buzz Jackson and Joann Triche drop me a note let me know how the scene works for you.

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Bill Okal
Bill Okal
2 years ago

I had some trouble hearing a lot what was going on due to my hearing problems of late and my not so great speakers. But I did get into the scene and found myself embracing their feelings, particularly near the end. It also aroused some feelings in my own past. For whatever it’s worth, I thought there was a lot of good stuff in there, e.g., the interior monologue. It certainly was a good teaser and I’m looking forward to reading the manuscript; fortunately, my eyes are holding on better than my ears.

Dana Smith
2 years ago
Reply to  Bill Okal

Hi Bill I am sure the written manuscript will be louder! Hopeful it will get to you in next few weeks. I’m very happy to learn you got to get a taste of what I’ve been up to More soon Dana

Rhys Thomas
2 years ago

I really enjoyed that audio snippet. Sucked me in with believability and held me with good metaphors, descriptions and progressing storyline. I’m impressed. “We’re in each others’ lost and found.” Loved that.

Dana Smith
2 years ago
Reply to  Rhys Thomas

Thank you Mr. Rhys Thomas
I’m in pause mode but will continue to record. I work standing up, as in any performance you do your best work on your feet, moving with the characters, trying to meet the moment. And with the pandemic in full on recording is safe. I appreciate your generosity my friend. Best

Anonymous
Anonymous
2 years ago

Fantastic! Looking forward to more. Delicious for the ears 😋