Comedy requires concision. As I’ve been building my story I’ve had to battle filling in enough narrative to make the mind’s eye see the scene while maintaining the pace of the story so as not to derail the momentum. It is a brutal dance of first building the chapter and then removing anything that does not propel the plot or is not funny… There is a degree of difficulty here that I would not have been capable of understanding had I not written two bigger novels.
HOT SPRING HONEYMOON
“Always use a high roller at a card game,” Fletcher said.
“Poker playing, men play cards all the time.”
“Mormon’s don’t…” Gage said.
“Give a Mormon half a chance,” Fletch said, “and they’ll be most hung-over rooster crowing at sunrise.”
“Enjoy a game twice as much,” Keefe said, “and be three times as ashamed.”